This week in Totara 2 we have been working on narrative writing we watched a video the was called sometimes the stars and we had to theme our narrative about the video but add our own twist this is mine.
Hey Bella. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. Think about perhaps changing the format of your post so your writing is easier to read for next time. Keep up the great blogging!
Kia ora Bella, It's Angelina from Totara 3. I really like this piece of writing because it was suspenseful and made you want to keep reading, even though I have read it I am still wondering what is going to happen. You also have a very interesting title that pulls the reader in. The one and only thing you could work on is adding in some grammar, full stops, commas, and capital letter. Other then that amazing post.
Hey Bella. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. Think about perhaps changing the format of your post so your writing is easier to read for next time.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great blogging!
Kia ora Bella, It's Angelina from Totara 3. I really like this piece of writing because it was suspenseful and made you want to keep reading, even though I have read it I am still wondering what is going to happen. You also have a very interesting title that pulls the reader in. The one and only thing you could work on is adding in some grammar, full stops, commas, and capital letter. Other then that amazing post.
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